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I_am_Borg

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#1 15 years ago

Hi everyone. I am starting work on a short UNNOFICIAL and UNNCANNONICAL story about a Nova class vessel called the USS Horizon. I have written the first chapter. Also included in the stories will be "illustrations" that are screenshots i will take from Bridge Commander. I'd love some feedback. The file is in rich text format, so everyone should be able to open it. Enjoy

One thing though, I cant post this enriched text on thois forum!!

I will post a text only version, but you can email me at [email]julian_gp999@hotmail.com[/email] and i will send you the rich text version, with pics. Thanx!!




Galaxy Class

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#2 15 years ago

Egad man. Punctuation is your friend! Paragraphs!




elminster

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#3 15 years ago

Good idea, looks good but I got eyestrain reading it.

Sort the formatting so its readable. :eek:




I_am_Borg

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#4 15 years ago

I know its just a rough copy right now, but i was wondering, what do you think of teh actual story!:D




starforce2

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#5 15 years ago

Sounds a bit too rough. How about a summary? You get the thing in decent formatt and I'll read it, and perhaps give ya some advice. Myself, I have a non-trek sci-fi (with similarites to trek, B5 and starwars) that is currently 110 pages.




ShadowDragon8685

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#6 15 years ago

Damn*t Jim, I'm an Engineer, not an editor!

Seriously man, even for a rough draft, -polish is your friend!-

Aside from that... It has potential. But I fear that it may turn out into just another story of fights and destruction.

Ya know, I started a Star Trek story... I stopped because, after I lost my TOS Trek MUSE character due to a frickin' unfair nutter ad.... anyway, I got the start of a story. I'll see if I can put the current (as-wrote) copy online later when I'm at my own computer. (at a family member's for New Years. Yay. on that note, don't drink and navigate, and for god sakes man, firearms are -not- an acceptable way to show enthuesium.