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Lukeh

Yay for cotton mouth!

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#1 11 years ago

Free now do they walk Once chained, now unleashed Dancing in the shadows Laughing with cruelty Torture is the prime entertainment Executed by foul blackhearts Upon fools lured with promise.

Now closer we stalk Gaining ground upon the infidels Tonight is that of a hunt But we are not the prey Fear is chased away Our leader's zeal infinite We know not what lie in wait.

In darkest shadow the flock Just ahead of the party Waiting for a striking opportunity The lust of the killing unanimous Tonight shall not be the end But the beginning The Demonic Age hath begun

Onward we go on Caution scarce, courage a commodity Weapons aglow in the presence Satan shant prevail over such a force! his demonic entourage will last no more All is silent Until a screech.

Talons wrip into unprotected flesh Wrapping around to tear the jugular Life juice flying over all Foolish, unsuspecting men Tonight is your last Soon they will meet Lucifer And all of the Counsel

Blades unsheathed Horses rear up Whinnies fill the air Sheer terror overwhelms all else As the enemy is seen Small children With blood eyes and raking nails

Soon all is silent Only one, the zealer, remains All others lie dead A meal for rats and vultures Touching the man is impossible Sinless is he He stand now, mace at the ready.

Where are you, traitorous Brutus? Lucifer, your army needeth thy service Oden, great is thy might but arisen have you not The village children stand no chance How can they murder what they cannot even stand to gaze upon? Weary they grow. Now they must eat.

The man lowers his mace. Tears fill his eyes Anguish taking over His own son now feasting upon Comrade's corpse. Satanic spirits hold his soul How can he touch his heir? Defeat without death.

Longlife becomes his curse. The Triumvirate rules earth.




Captain Fist

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#2 11 years ago

I'm not much of a fan of poetry, I am however, a big fan of Satanic Themes, so I do like this. I'm a writer myself, a lot of my stories are Dark Fantasy or Dark Sci-Fi. Unfortuneatly, they are all exceedingly long and on paper, and I don't feel like uploading them.




Banach

Governor of state of insanity

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#3 11 years ago

Good poem but it didn't seem to flow at some points, I'd take out words like 'jugular' because they aren't really poematic at all.

But all in all pretty good.