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SpaceDug2005

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#31 13 years ago

Im gonna start a new story cuz im confused about this one...... "I am High inquisitor Helgrimson of the Ordo Xenos" shouted the inquisitor to the force of imperial guard of Cadia, Albitern and Armageddon sprayed before him on the dead wastes of the planet Char Margak, "and you will fight for me till the end against this xenos horde!" there was a cheer from the crowd below, almost every single guardsmen roared in approval, save for one lone Cadian. Hengel Skolt, a Kasrkin Grenadier of the Cadian 707th, and he believed the imperium should not fight, although that is what he had done for the past 30 years he had fought. Char Margak, or Feth-hole 1 as it was known by the guardsmen, was a desolte planet used as a hostile training ground for the Albitern guardsmen, but as of 4 days ago, had been threatened by a Tau invasion. Where Skolt know stood was the place a Tau Ethereal had its head burst open, and the strange pheramone released from its forehead had drove the nearby guardsman into a killing frenzy, shouting "FOR THE GREATER GOOD!", and right now, Skolt could feel the last sensation of the pheramone lingering in the back of his nose. "For the greater good...." he mumbled, as he levelled his hellrifle to his eye, and fired at Helgrimson. The High Inquisitor was blown off his feet, nad hit the ground already dead. Skolt was beaten into submission by his fellow guardsmen, before being carted away into the Cadian Regimental command field base to be interogated by Inquisitor Korsek Akh. He had been beaten and questioned every ten minutes for 10 hours before the interrogators left him to rot in the lavafields of Char Margak, where hge waited. He waited and waited for his saviour of the GReater Good.......

EDIT: feel free if you want to continue the previous story, just put a 1) before the continuation and remember to put it into paragraphs! If your continueing this one, just put a 2) before the continueation




Tyrant Of Death

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#32 13 years ago

The problem with these is that youre trying to put all the armies in the stories, it dont work, just stick to one, or even within chaos, you should of just stuck to a nurgle marine with the frenziness of a beserker, tho u shudnt of bin like that, all chaos are gona be blood raged maniacs, just khorne are even more so, and 2 good teams are boring i think.. imperials and tau, 2 crap combat races, rely only upon guns and (to me) thats kinda boring, id prefer them getting up close and personaly tearing pieces out of each other and doing 2 stories will just be confusing. Personally i think chaos and tyranids and maybe orks are the most interesting armies cos they can addapt to anything, be it heavy weapons, mutated arms or wateva, they can fight using any tactic, getting up close, blowing them up from far away( and yes orks can, Zzap cannons :D, and tyranids have cool ranged weapons)or a bit of both whereas marines are just shoot, now ur gonna say assault marines but its not as interesting as bloodcrzed mad doks with dirtys syringes or tyranids with giant sythes or chaos with warped body parts or just imperial weaponry, of course an exception is spacewolves but still, tau are jus boring.. OH WE R SO GREAT ... WE HAVE A RAILGUN, imperial guard r like the same tho they dnt pretend not to be pussies with stupid comments like the tau do, they admit their fools who want to run away.




The Body Popper

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#33 13 years ago

yah hes right. we will take this a few steps back. fonzy is a champion of nurgle, he just returned to the material universe...




Tyrant Of Death

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#34 13 years ago

I say we continue from where Yamacon left off, just becuase a harlequin is sparing him makes him no less a mad rotting man, and who says she hasnt seen the confusion in his mind, and as he is the champion of nurgle she may focus on reading his thoughts.. a confused enemy who can be made to trust u can easily fall into a trap, but he could also be expecting it, so if you dont mind i say we continue from that point, but focus it more around chaos fighting spacemarines, and maybe.. as the harlequins are the protecters of the black library they may have information for him about what he follows etc....., tho if its easier just go back, im not gonna post on this until its gets back into a nice flow.. hope it does soon, i enjoy writing stuff lol, but only if it involves death. A story with many different armies can still be done, its just going to be damn hard to make good.




The Body Popper

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#35 13 years ago

agreed. somone else do it though.




Yamacon

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#36 13 years ago

at the moment the story stands with 3 armys, a ultramarines, black legion, and eldar, with verious cults inside the bunker complex, yes i agree its confusing, but thats the best way of explaining whats going on inside the chaos marines head, the god have plans for him, each want him for a different reason thought, and thats where you explore what each god wants from him, if u ask me nurgle has stolen fonzy of the blood god and he would rather appreciete him being returned, and if the harlequin has been sent to gaurd him he must not be let back into khornes hands - see, its simple when u look at it ^^




The Body Popper

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#37 13 years ago

thats not very simple




Yamacon

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#38 13 years ago

is to me :D




The Body Popper

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#39 13 years ago

well you live in a little bubble.




SpaceDug2005

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#40 13 years ago

is n o-one even going to answer/continue my story?