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RapidFire_Ryan56

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#1 15 years ago

Hey this is another poem I wrote. It's not as wacky as the last one....

Stumble Down By Ryan Walters

When I walk around I just feel down. What goes around Comes around. I feel like I drowned, Will I ever be found?

These problems never go away.My thoughts of me are starting to go a stray.I walk around trying to debate...Just hoping this is not my fate.

But when I see you, I feel there is nothing I can't do.You are just like an Angel to me.Is this the place just to be?I stand there trying to tell, but till' I do I feel like I'm falling straight to hell. 12/20/02

So what do you think?




AutoCept

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#2 15 years ago

AutoCept is at a loss for words..




RapidFire_Ryan56

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#3 15 years ago

Thanks, I appreciate your thoughts and comments... :)




FileJune

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#4 15 years ago

;) good work, practice make perfect ;)




Dutchman

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#5 15 years ago

I'm really bad at ryming and make poems, but I think it's a good one you got there, RapidFire_Ryan56!!!




Eckie Thump

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#6 15 years ago

A single tear rolls down my cheek as you search for the answers that you seek, Your writing speaks a thousand word though some might find it quite absurd, Your skills are now almost complete your words fill paper by the sheet, but my advice is "take your time... it doesn't always have to rhyme!"

Seriously though, some good sentiments there, but concentrate on content rather than the rhyme. You're not trying to write limericks after all.




RapidFire_Ryan56

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#7 15 years ago

Thanks, I don't know if it is all that good... I like but certainly not and oscar winner... :( Thank you for your support :)




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#8 15 years ago

wow thats nicedropsjar:, u should make a song out of that or something:dance:




Dutchman

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#9 15 years ago

my english isn't that good that I can make english poems and rhymes, but maybe I can in Dutch, but I won't post 'em here, it's like Chinese for you guys :lol:




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#10 15 years ago
Originally posted by Dutchman it's like Chinese for you guys :lol:

haaaaayyyyyaaaaaaa

wut do u meen ur english is not good enough, u have so many freaking posts. to learn better english check this site out- ENGLISH